Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!

Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.

is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:

waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey

(1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
(2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
(3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.

is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.

Sarwar Raz

On Thursday, 3 June 2021 at 06:15:00 UTC+1, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
>
> Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
>
> is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
>
> waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
>
> (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye..
>
> is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
>
> Sarwar Raz

Sarwar Raz SaaHib, aadaab.

is "mashq" meN mujhe shariik karne ke liye maiN aap kaa mamnuun huuN. lekin mujhe apnii 3izzat 3aziiz hai aur ise madd-i-nazar rakhte hu'e bihtar yahii ho gaa kih aap mujh se kisii javaab kii tavaqqu3 nah rakheN aur yahii samjheN kih maiN is dars se Ghair-Haazir huuN!:-) lekin mumkin hai kih maiN kisii khiRkii yaa jharoke se nazreN churaa ke dekhuuN kih andar kyaa ho rahaa hai:-)

aap kaa xair-andesh,
Naseer

On Thursday, 3 June 2021 at 06:15:00 UTC+1, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
>
> Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
>
> is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
>
> waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
>
> (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye..
>
> is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
>
> Sarwar Raz

Sarwar Raz SaaHib, aadaab.

is "mashq" meN mujhe shariik karne ke liye maiN aap kaa mamnuun huuN. lekin mujhe apnii 3izzat 3aziiz hai aur ise madd-i-nazar rakhte hu'e bihtar yahii ho gaa kih aap mujh se kisii javaab kii tavaqqu3 nah rakheN aur yahii samjheN kih maiN is dars se Ghair-Haazir huuN!:-) lekin mumkin hai kih maiN kisii khiRkii yaa jharoke se nazreN churaa ke dekhuuN kih andar kyaa ho rahaa hai:-)

agar aap munaasib samjheN to Nagesh SaaHib ko bhii is mashq meN Hissah lene kii da3vat de sakte haiN kyoNkih mujhe ma3luum hai kih vuh is mauzuu3 (3ilm-i-3aruuz aur is se vaabastah masaa'il) se xaasii dilchaspii rakhte haiN.

aap kaa xair-andesh,
Naseer

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 12:15:00 AM UTC-5, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
>
> waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.

> Sarwar Raz

Sarwar sahib,

Thank you, oh how I love such assignments! :-)

RK sahib has had me practicing answers to Q1 and Q2, and I would love to expand to Q3 based on Irfan sahib's notes. I honestly can not skip 2 and jump to 3 directly, I need the crutch.

Once I have my answers submitted, studying input and discussions provided by my three esteemed ustaads, your, RK sahib and Irfan sahib will be priceless. How fortunate I am, triply blessed. :-))

A note to my study buddy Nagesh sahib:

I don't want to jump the gun and start posting before you have had a chance to work on the assignment. I have been guilty of that in the past. Do we want to set a deadline for posting answers?

Exciting stuff, let us go!

________Zoya

Zoya Sahiba:

Please don't wait on me this time. I am stuck with some mundane but necessary tasks. I will try to follow this thread, as soon as I can. Pleasure deferred but not denied.

Regards,

Nagesh

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 7:31:44 AM UTC-7, Zoya wrote:
> On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 12:15:00 AM UTC-5, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> >
> > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
>
> > (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> > (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> > (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.
> > Sarwar Raz
>
> Sarwar sahib,
>
> Thank you, oh how I love such assignments! :-)
>
> RK sahib has had me practicing answers to Q1 and Q2, and I would love to expand to Q3 based on Irfan sahib's notes. I honestly can not skip 2 and jump to 3 directly, I need the crutch.
>
> Once I have my answers submitted, studying input and discussions provided by my three esteemed ustaads, your, RK sahib and Irfan sahib will be priceless. How fortunate I am, triply blessed. :-))
>
> A note to my study buddy Nagesh sahib:
>
> I don't want to jump the gun and start posting before you have had a chance to work on the assignment. I have been guilty of that in the past. Do we want to set a deadline for posting answers?
>
> Exciting stuff, let us go!
>
> ________Zoya

Sarwar sahib,

Now that my only other classmate Nagesh sahib has given me permission, I am submitting my first attempt.

> waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
>
> (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.

beHr: Hazaj Musamman Akhrab

The second misra' is in beHr, the first one is not.
The problem is that the second 'waqt' is extra, and puts the misra' out of meter.

> (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?

taqtii':

2 2 1 / 1 2 2 2 /2 2 1 / 1 2 2 2
waq t-aa ne/ do aa ne do /phir tum ko/ ba taa deN ge
mash riq ka/ si raa uThh kar/magh rib se/ mi laa deN ge

> (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.

Maf - uu - lu Ma - faa - ii - lun Maf - uu - lu Ma - faa - ii - lun

waq-taa ne do aa-ne do phir tum ko ba-taa deN-ge
mash-riq ka si-raa uThh kar magh-rib se mi-laa deN-ge

Q.E.D.

The singular privileged 'shaagird' of the three best 'ustaads' ever,

_______Zoya

Nagesh sahib,

You bailed out buddy, but will you please at least look at my taqtii' attempt to see if you agree with me? It is always a lot more fun when we cross check our answers.

RK sahib/Irfan sahib,

I am eagerly waiting for your responses. If I did well, the credit is yours, if I missed something basic, the blame goes to me. I believe Sarwar sahib is also curious about how well the Arooz Fort has been guarded in his absence.

Sarwar sahib,

Maybe you too are waiting for some input from the other two in house experts. When will I get my grade? I know in your book I have always been A+, but still. :-)

Thank you all,

_______Zoya

On Wednesday, June 2, 2021 at 10:15:00 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
>
> Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
>
> is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
>
> waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
>
> (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye..
>
> is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
>
> Sarwar Raz

pir. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey
and
magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey
are the same.

Let's look at the first part
mash. riq. kaa. si. raa. requires that the breakdown be done as waq. taa. ne. do. waq.

in the middle remains
ut. kar.
taa. ne. do.

If ut could be broken down as ut. t. it would work otherwise not.

One can rectify as
waq. taa. ne. do. waq. taa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 4:21:30 PM UTC-7, bekas Murray wrote:
> On Wednesday, June 2, 2021 at 10:15:00 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> > Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
> >
> > Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
> >
> > is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
> >
> > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> >
> > (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> > (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> > (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.
> >
> > is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
> >
> > Sarwar Raz
> pir. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey
> and
> magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey
> are the same.
>
> Let's look at the first part
> mash. riq. kaa. si. raa. requires that the breakdown be done as waq. taa. ne. do. waq.
>
>
> in the middle remains
> ut. kar.
> taa. ne. do.
>
> If ut could be broken down as ut. t. it would work otherwise not.
>
> One can rectify as
> waq. taa. ne. do. waq. taa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.
should read as
waq. taa. ne. do. waq. t. aa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.

Zoya Sahiba:

I can see nothing I disagree with. But I am not a grader of this exercise, and I lack the deep knowledge that others have, so don't celebrate yet. It would have taken me forever to detect the extra "waqt".

Regards,

Nagesh

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 3:34:40 PM UTC-7, Zoya wrote:
> Nagesh sahib,
>
> You bailed out buddy, but will you please at least look at my taqtii' attempt to see if you agree with me? It is always a lot more fun when we cross check our answers.
>
> RK sahib/Irfan sahib,
>
> I am eagerly waiting for your responses. If I did well, the credit is yours, if I missed something basic, the blame goes to me. I believe Sarwar sahib is also curious about how well the Arooz Fort has been guarded in his absence.
>
> Sarwar sahib,
>
> Maybe you too are waiting for some input from the other two in house experts. When will I get my grade? I know in your book I have always been A+, but still. :-)
>
> Thank you all,
>
> _______Zoya

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 4:37:43 PM UTC-7, bekas Murray wrote:
> On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 4:21:30 PM UTC-7, bekas Murray wrote:
> > On Wednesday, June 2, 2021 at 10:15:00 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> > > Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
> > >
> > > Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
> > >
> > > is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
> > >
> > > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> > >
> > > (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> > > (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> > > (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.
> > >
> > > is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
> > >
> > > Sarwar Raz
> > pir. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey
> > and
> > magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey
> > are the same.
> >
> > Let's look at the first part
> > mash. riq. kaa. si. raa. requires that the breakdown be done as waq. taa. ne. do. waq.
> >
> >
> > in the middle remains
> > ut. kar.
> > taa. ne. do.
> >
> > If ut could be broken down as ut. t. it would work otherwise not.
> >
> > One can rectify as
> > waq. taa. ne. do. waq. taa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> > mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.
> should read as
> waq. taa. ne. do. waq. t. aa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.

Keeping the second misra the same as the original given
mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
22112222211222
Then first misra may be written as
waqt aane do waqt aane do tum ko bataa deN gey

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 7:26:45 PM UTC-5, bekas Murray wrote:

aadaab Bekas sahib,

I am not sure if we have ever communicated directly before, but your name is familiar to me. Good to have you back in the group.

> Keeping the second misra the same as the original given
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey

> 221 1222 221 1222
> Then first misra may be written as
> waqt aane do waqt aane do tum ko bataa deN gey

I agree, this works too. In fact it is one of the options I had also considered, but decided to keep 'phir' and lose 'waqt'. Not sure which one sounds better, but both fit. Will let the experts choose.

I am going to respond to your first attempt separately.

Thanks.

________Zoya

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 5:26:45 PM UTC-7, bekas Murray wrote:
> On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 4:37:43 PM UTC-7, bekas Murray wrote:
> > On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 4:21:30 PM UTC-7, bekas Murray wrote:
> > > On Wednesday, June 2, 2021 at 10:15:00 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> > > > Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
> > > >
> > > > Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
> > > >
> > > > is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
> > > >
> > > > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > > > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> > > >
> > > > (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> > > > (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> > > > (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.
> > > >
> > > > is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
> > > >
> > > > Sarwar Raz
> > > pir. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey
> > > and
> > > magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey
> > > are the same.
> > >
> > > Let's look at the first part
> > > mash. riq. kaa. si. raa. requires that the breakdown be done as waq. taa. ne. do. waq.
> > >
> > >
> > > in the middle remains
> > > ut. kar.
> > > taa. ne. do.
> > >
> > > If ut could be broken down as ut. t. it would work otherwise not.
> > >
> > > One can rectify as
> > > waq. taa. ne. do. waq. taa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> > > mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey..
> > should read as
> > waq. taa. ne. do. waq. t. aa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> > mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.
> Keeping the second misra the same as the original given
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> 22112222211222
> Then first misra may be written as
> waqt aane do waqt aane do tum ko bataa deN gey
The above is if you wish to match all 2s and 1s but let's say this is not always necessary for meter we can write the second misra as
mash. riq. kaa. | si. raa. ut. kar. | magh. rib. se. | mi. laa. de. gey. |
221 | 1222 | 221 | 1222 |
Now let us look at first misra again
waq. taa. ne. | do. waq. taa. ne do | phir. tum. ko. | ba. taa. de. gey. |
221 | 1221 | 1221 | 1222

This is allowed
So if one is not purely following the matching of 1 and 2s this is considered acceptable.

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 6:37:43 PM UTC-5, bekas Murray wrote:

> > One can rectify as

> waq. taa. ne. do. waq. t. aa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.

Bekas sahib,

You have got the two misraas to match, but it required changing both of them. I personally would avoid doing so since the second misraa was already in a standard beHr and could be kept 'as is'.

Having said that, I am trying to figure out which standard beHr this modified she'r fits. I have found one which is very close, but no cigar.

Will you please name the standard beHr that you used and its corresponding arkaan, 'feet' as I call them in the binary 12 nomenclature? I will also work on this some more on my own, but would eventually like to see which beHr you had in mind.

Thanks.

________Zoya

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 8:01:09 PM UTC-5, bekas Murray wrote:

> The above is if you wish to match all 2s and 1s but let's say this is not always necessary for meter we can write the second misra as
> mash. riq. kaa. | si. raa. ut. kar. | magh. rib. se. | mi. laa. de. gey. |
> 221 | 1222 | 221 | 1222 |
> Now let us look at first misra again
> waq. taa. ne. | do. waq. taa. ne do | phir. tum. ko. | ba. taa. de. gey. |
> 221 | 1221 | 1221 | 1222
>
> This is allowed
> So if one is not purely following the matching of 1 and 2s this is considered acceptable.

I agree. I have discussed this with Irfan sahib before. As per my understanding, with some exceptions, most of the 2 s can be broken as 1-1. However, I personally prefer a perfect match, keeping the corresponding feet in the two misraas identical. I find that easier to work with.

______Zoya

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 7:18:15 PM UTC-5, Nagesh wrote:

> Zoya Sahiba:
>
> I can see nothing I disagree with. But I am not a grader of this exercise, and I lack the deep knowledge that others have, so don't celebrate yet. It would have taken me forever to detect the extra "waqt".
>
> Regards,

> Nagesh

Thanks, Nagesh sahib. Your stamp means a lot to me since you have been my 'hamsafar' on the 'Arooz Cruise.' :)

But yes, I know better than to start celebrating this early. I remember in the past we have both agreed on stuff, until Prof RK entered the classroom and told us otherwise. And now we have Prof Raz also! Could be double trouble. :-))

________Zoya

On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 6:13:28 PM UTC-7, Zoya wrote:
> On Thursday, June 3, 2021 at 8:01:09 PM UTC-5, bekas Murray wrote:
>
> > The above is if you wish to match all 2s and 1s but let's say this is not always necessary for meter we can write the second misra as
> > mash. riq. kaa. | si. raa. ut. kar. | magh. rib. se. | mi. laa. de. gey.. |
> > 221 | 1222 | 221 | 1222 |
> > Now let us look at first misra again
> > waq. taa. ne. | do. waq. taa. ne do | phir. tum. ko. | ba. taa. de. gey.. |
> > 221 | 1221 | 1221 | 1222
> >
> > This is allowed
> > So if one is not purely following the matching of 1 and 2s this is considered acceptable.
> I agree. I have discussed this with Irfan sahib before. As per my understanding, with some exceptions, most of the 2 s can be broken as 1-1. However, I personally prefer a perfect match, keeping the corresponding feet in the two misraas identical. I find that easier to work with.
>
> ______Zoya
hazaj musamman saalim is
1222 | 1222| 1222 | 1222
the second misra's second and fourth part are 1222
for parts one the first harf is dropped (kharm) and 7th (kaf) together that is kharb. same in part 3 so the name becomes hazaj musamman akhrab.
similarly for misra one the name will be hazaj musamman akrab makfuf saalimulaakhir.

On Friday, 4 June 2021 at 00:21:30 UTC+1, bekas Murray wrote:
> On Wednesday, June 2, 2021 at 10:15:00 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> > Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
> >
> > Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
> >
> > is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
> >
> > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> >
> > (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> > (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> > (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.
> >
> > is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
> >
> > Sarwar Raz
> pir. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey
> and
> magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey
> are the same.
>
> Let's look at the first part
> mash. riq. kaa. si. raa. requires that the breakdown be done as waq. taa. ne. do. waq.
>
>
> in the middle remains
> ut. kar.
> taa. ne. do.
>
> If ut could be broken down as ut. t. it would work otherwise not.
>
> One can rectify as
> waq. taa. ne. do. waq. taa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.

Tahir SaaHib, salaam 3arz hai

Nice to see you after such a long time. I hope all is well with you, your family and all your loved ones.

Naseer

On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 5:28:25 AM UTC-5, bekas Murray wrote:

> hazaj musamman saalim is
> 1222 | 1222| 1222 | 1222
> the second misra's second and fourth part are 1222
> for parts one the first harf is dropped (kharm) and 7th (kaf) together that is kharb. same in part 3 so the name becomes hazaj musamman akhrab.
> similarly for misra one the name will be hazaj musamman akrab makfuf saalimulaakhir.

Wow, this is very impressive.

Thank you so much. This is the chapter that I definitely need to work on more. I need to familiarize myself with all the terms used in various beHr names, and their respective actions on the feet within a beHr. I know some of the terms, but not all.

Once you spell out which harf is dropped where, I can take it from there and fit in the taqtii'.

Great lesson!

Thanks again,

_______Zoya

On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 12:00:21 PM UTC-5, Zoya wrote:
> On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 5:28:25 AM UTC-5, bekas Murray wrote:
>
> > hazaj musamman saalim is
> > 1222 | 1222| 1222 | 1222
> > the second misra's second and fourth part are 1222
> > for parts one the first harf is dropped (kharm) and 7th (kaf) together that is kharb. same in part 3 so the name becomes hazaj musamman akhrab.
> > similarly for misra one the name will be hazaj musamman akrab makfuf saalimulaakhir.
> Wow, this is very impressive.
>
> Thank you so much. This is the chapter that I definitely need to work on more. I need to familiarize myself with all the terms used in various beHr names, and their respective actions on the feet within a beHr. I know some of the terms, but not all.
>
> Once you spell out which harf is dropped where, I can take it from there and fit in the taqtii'.
>
> Great lesson!
>
> Thanks again,
>
> _______Zoya
------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Dear Friends: aadaab!
I think it is time I provided the answer to the riddle. It was designed to show that the 1-2 gardaan is of very limited use in Arooz, and tthat too for the novices. Most Arooz books start with 1-2 or l-s gardaan and graduate to the real Arooz fast. To make a long story short:

The subject she'r (by Safi Lucknawi) and its taqtee' are given below:

waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
(maf,oolu, mu,faa,eelu , mu,faa,eelu, mu,faa,ee,lun )
mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
(maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun)

Some of you have tried to change the she'r so it will fit your ideas. That is not allowed. The she'r is perfectly OK and acceptable AS IS!! The wazn of the both of the misra's is different but the she'r is flawless according to Arooz. Something to think about, is it not? Let me explain:

There is an important principle in Arooz called "Taskeen-e-Ausat" (explanation and details deferred for later). When you apply it to the first miSra', a new wazn emerges (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun) i.e. the wazn of the second miSra' ! How neat! Arooz allows the use of these miSra's in the Ghazal. The principle and the usage are universally accepted and practiced by those who know! Thanks for your time and attention.

Sarwar Raz

,

On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 3:35:58 AM UTC-7, Naseer wrote:
> On Friday, 4 June 2021 at 00:21:30 UTC+1, bekas Murray wrote:
> > On Wednesday, June 2, 2021 at 10:15:00 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> > > Yaaraan-e-meHfil: aadaab a'rZ hai!
> > >
> > > Zoya Saaheba ne mujh se Harf-e-Ravee aur i'lm-e-qaafiye par raushanee Daalne ko kahaa hai. DonoN Arooz kaa hee bohat aham Hissah haiN. ChooN.k Irfan SaaHeb Arooz par ek silsilah yahaaN pesh kar chuke haiN is liye maiN ne us ko dekhnaa munaasib samjha taa.k baat nah duhraa,ooN aur yeh bhee ma'loom ho jaaye keh wahaaN kis Had tak Irfan saaheb ne likhaa hai. wahaaN mujh ko iHsaas huwaa keh 1-2 kee gardaan par bohat zor hai. yeh gardaan shuroo' meN ista'maal kee jaa saktee hai lekin Arooz kaa iHaatah is se naheeN ho saktaa. kam se kam maiN yehee jaantaa hooN.
> > >
> > > is nukteh ko waaZeh karne ke liye maiN ek she'r likh rahaa hooN. yahaaN kisee kaa imtiHaan hargiz naheeN mat'loob hai. Sirf do teen sawaaloN kaa jawaab chaahiye. ALUP ke tamaam membraan se aur Khaas taur se Irfan saaHeb, Naseer SaaHeb aur Qais SaaHeb se rehnumaayee kee guzaarish hai. she'r aur us par sawaalaat neeche likhtaa hooN:
> > >
> > > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> > >
> > > (1) kyaa yeh she'r beHr aur wazn meN SaHeeH hai? agar hai to kaise aur naheeN hai to kyoN? jawaab ke saath apnee daleel likhiye.
> > > (2) she'r kee taqtee' 1-2 kee gardaan meN kaise kee jaaye gee?
> > > (3) saath hee is she'r kee Aroozee (riwaayatee?) taqt'ee bhee kar deejiye.
> > >
> > > is mehrbaanee kaa shukriyah. yaqeena" aap ke jawaabaat se ham sab ke i'lm meN iZaafah ho gaa aur yeh baRee baat hai.
> > >
> > > Sarwar Raz
> > pir. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey
> > and
> > magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey
> > are the same.
> >
> > Let's look at the first part
> > mash. riq. kaa. si. raa. requires that the breakdown be done as waq. taa. ne. do. waq.
> >
> >
> > in the middle remains
> > ut. kar.
> > taa. ne. do.
> >
> > If ut could be broken down as ut. t. it would work otherwise not.
> >
> > One can rectify as
> > waq. taa. ne. do. waq. taa. ne. do. tum. ko. ba. taa. de. gey.
> > mash. riq. kaa. si.raa. u. thaa. kar. magh. rib. se. mi. laa. de. gey.
> Tahir SaaHib, salaam 3arz hai
>
> Nice to see you after such a long time. I hope all is well with you, your family and all your loved ones.
>
> Naseer

Sab theek hai. aap kahiyay.

On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 12:27:29 PM UTC-5, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:

> Dear Friends: aadaab!

Sarwar sahib, aadaab,

> I think it is time I provided the answer to the riddle.

So it was a riddle! I should have guessed there was a catch when you invited RK sahib and Irfan sahib to respond. :)

It was designed to show that the 1-2 gardaan is of very limited use in Arooz, and that too for the novices. Most Arooz books start with 1-2 or l-s gardaan and graduate to the real Arooz fast.

Nagesh sahib and I will readily admit to be novices, we are nowhere near graduation, definitely not fast graduation. We are still taking baby steps. We can't spot trick questions! :)

To make a long story short:
>
> The subject she'r (by Safi Lucknawi) and its taqtee' are given below:
> waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> (maf,oolu, mu,faa,eelu , mu,faa,eelu, mu,faa,ee,lun )
> mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun)
>
> Some of you have tried to change the she'r so it will fit your ideas. That is not allowed. The she'r is perfectly OK and acceptable AS IS!! The wazn of the both of the misra's is different but the she'r is flawless according to Arooz. Something to think about, is it not?

Definitely something to think about, Sarwar sahib. We have previously discussed in Alup examples of asha'ar by established poets where the two misraas are in slightly different beHrs. I am still pretty clueless as to how and when to decide if those asha'ar are flawless (or flawed).

Let me explain:
>
> There is an important principle in Arooz called "Taskeen-e-Ausat" (explanation and details deferred for later). When you apply it to the first miSra', a new wazn emerges (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun) i.e. the wazn of the second miSra' ! How neat!

That's a 'wow' neat! I will wait for your deferred explanation and details, because honestly this is way beyond my current level of expertise.

Arooz allows the use of these miSra's in the Ghazal. The principle and the usage are universally accepted and practiced by those who know! Thanks for your time and attention.
>
> Sarwar Raz

Sarwar sahib, thanks for your time and attention. Alup has not been as vibrant lately as it once was, the golden phase is long over. Your presence is infusing new life in the group, I am hoping you will continue to participate as much as you can. We need you here.

Thank you.

PS: I will not ask you anymore to grade my paper. But maybe an 'A' for effort? At least I tried! :-)

Thank you, for everything,

Your 'nowhere near graduation' pupil,

________Zoya

On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 2:51:26 PM UTC-5, Zoya wrote:
> On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 12:27:29 PM UTC-5, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
>
> > Dear Friends: aadaab!
>
> Sarwar sahib, aadaab,
> > I think it is time I provided the answer to the riddle.
> So it was a riddle! I should have guessed there was a catch when you invited RK sahib and Irfan sahib to respond. :)
>
> It was designed to show that the 1-2 gardaan is of very limited use in Arooz, and that too for the novices. Most Arooz books start with 1-2 or l-s gardaan and graduate to the real Arooz fast.
>
> Nagesh sahib and I will readily admit to be novices, we are nowhere near graduation, definitely not fast graduation. We are still taking baby steps. We can't spot trick questions! :)
> To make a long story short:
> >
> > The subject she'r (by Safi Lucknawi) and its taqtee' are given below:
> > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > (maf,oolu, mu,faa,eelu , mu,faa,eelu, mu,faa,ee,lun )
> > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> > (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun)
> >
> > Some of you have tried to change the she'r so it will fit your ideas. That is not allowed. The she'r is perfectly OK and acceptable AS IS!! The wazn of the both of the misra's is different but the she'r is flawless according to Arooz. Something to think about, is it not?
> Definitely something to think about, Sarwar sahib. We have previously discussed in Alup examples of asha'ar by established poets where the two misraas are in slightly different beHrs. I am still pretty clueless as to how and when to decide if those asha'ar are flawless (or flawed).
> Let me explain:
> >
> > There is an important principle in Arooz called "Taskeen-e-Ausat" (explanation and details deferred for later). When you apply it to the first miSra', a new wazn emerges (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun) i.e. the wazn of the second miSra' ! How neat!
> That's a 'wow' neat! I will wait for your deferred explanation and details, because honestly this is way beyond my current level of expertise.
> Arooz allows the use of these miSra's in the Ghazal. The principle and the usage are universally accepted and practiced by those who know! Thanks for your time and attention.
> >
> > Sarwar Raz
> Sarwar sahib, thanks for your time and attention. Alup has not been as vibrant lately as it once was, the golden phase is long over. Your presence is infusing new life in the group, I am hoping you will continue to participate as much as you can. We need you here.
>
> Thank you.
>
> PS: I will not ask you anymore to grade my paper. But maybe an 'A' for effort? At least I tried! :-)
>
> Thank you, for everything,
>
> Your 'nowhere near graduation' pupil,
>
> ________Zoya
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Dear Zoya: I am afraid (and sorry) you are reading more into my response than I ever intended. Just look at how you have interpreted the word "riddle".. Perhaps we will talk outside of ALUP? Thanks.

Raz

Sarwar Sahib:

Thanks for the lesson. I am not sure my understanding of meter has improved, but I am sure my understanding of my own limitations has become greater. That is a good lesson in itself. I have a lot more to learn in this regard.

Regards,

Nagesh

On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 1:47:32 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 2:51:26 PM UTC-5, Zoya wrote:
> > On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 12:27:29 PM UTC-5, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> >
> > > Dear Friends: aadaab!
> >
> > Sarwar sahib, aadaab,
> > > I think it is time I provided the answer to the riddle.
> > So it was a riddle! I should have guessed there was a catch when you invited RK sahib and Irfan sahib to respond. :)
> >
> > It was designed to show that the 1-2 gardaan is of very limited use in Arooz, and that too for the novices. Most Arooz books start with 1-2 or l-s gardaan and graduate to the real Arooz fast.
> >
> > Nagesh sahib and I will readily admit to be novices, we are nowhere near graduation, definitely not fast graduation. We are still taking baby steps. We can't spot trick questions! :)
> > To make a long story short:
> > >
> > > The subject she'r (by Safi Lucknawi) and its taqtee' are given below:
> > > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > > (maf,oolu, mu,faa,eelu , mu,faa,eelu, mu,faa,ee,lun )
> > > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> > > (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun)
> > >
> > > Some of you have tried to change the she'r so it will fit your ideas. That is not allowed. The she'r is perfectly OK and acceptable AS IS!! The wazn of the both of the misra's is different but the she'r is flawless according to Arooz. Something to think about, is it not?
> > Definitely something to think about, Sarwar sahib. We have previously discussed in Alup examples of asha'ar by established poets where the two misraas are in slightly different beHrs. I am still pretty clueless as to how and when to decide if those asha'ar are flawless (or flawed).
> > Let me explain:
> > >
> > > There is an important principle in Arooz called "Taskeen-e-Ausat" (explanation and details deferred for later). When you apply it to the first miSra', a new wazn emerges (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun) i.e. the wazn of the second miSra' ! How neat!
> > That's a 'wow' neat! I will wait for your deferred explanation and details, because honestly this is way beyond my current level of expertise.
> > Arooz allows the use of these miSra's in the Ghazal. The principle and the usage are universally accepted and practiced by those who know! Thanks for your time and attention.
> > >
> > > Sarwar Raz
> > Sarwar sahib, thanks for your time and attention. Alup has not been as vibrant lately as it once was, the golden phase is long over. Your presence is infusing new life in the group, I am hoping you will continue to participate as much as you can. We need you here.
> >
> > Thank you.
> >
> > PS: I will not ask you anymore to grade my paper. But maybe an 'A' for effort? At least I tried! :-)
> >
> > Thank you, for everything,
> >
> > Your 'nowhere near graduation' pupil,
> >
> > ________Zoya
> ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
> Dear Zoya: I am afraid (and sorry) you are reading more into my response than I ever intended. Just look at how you have interpreted the word "riddle". Perhaps we will talk outside of ALUP? Thanks.
>
> Raz

On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 1:55:04 PM UTC-7, Nagesh wrote:
> Sarwar Sahib:
>
> Thanks for the lesson. I am not sure my understanding of meter has improved, but I am sure my understanding of my own limitations has become greater.. That is a good lesson in itself. I have a lot more to learn in this regard.
>

This has to do with how aruuzis treat certain combinations of harkat aur sakoon.
When three harkaats show up together the middle one can be changed to a sakoon. So in the misra two the order was
221 | 1221 | 1221 | 1222

Wherever you are seeing 112 the harkat represented by the second 1 can be changed to a sakoon turning the 11 to a 2.
In the given example the first misra is doing it to 112 at the end of the second rukan and beginning of the third and pulling the 11 across the border of the second and third rukan into the second rukan as a 2 leaving only a 221 in the third rukan.
Thus 221 | 1222 | 221 | 1222

> Regards,
>
> Nagesh
> On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 1:47:32 PM UTC-7, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> > On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 2:51:26 PM UTC-5, Zoya wrote:
> > > On Friday, June 4, 2021 at 12:27:29 PM UTC-5, Sarwar A. Raz wrote:
> > >
> > > > Dear Friends: aadaab!
> > >
> > > Sarwar sahib, aadaab,
> > > > I think it is time I provided the answer to the riddle.
> > > So it was a riddle! I should have guessed there was a catch when you invited RK sahib and Irfan sahib to respond. :)
> > >
> > > It was designed to show that the 1-2 gardaan is of very limited use in Arooz, and that too for the novices. Most Arooz books start with 1-2 or l-s gardaan and graduate to the real Arooz fast.
> > >
> > > Nagesh sahib and I will readily admit to be novices, we are nowhere near graduation, definitely not fast graduation. We are still taking baby steps. We can't spot trick questions! :)
> > > To make a long story short:
> > > >
> > > > The subject she'r (by Safi Lucknawi) and its taqtee' are given below:
> > > > waqt aane do, waqt aane do, phir tum ko bataa deN gey
> > > > (maf,oolu, mu,faa,eelu , mu,faa,eelu, mu,faa,ee,lun )
> > > > mashriq kaa siraa uThh kar maGhrib se milaa deN gey
> > > > (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun)
> > > >
> > > > Some of you have tried to change the she'r so it will fit your ideas. That is not allowed. The she'r is perfectly OK and acceptable AS IS!! The wazn of the both of the misra's is different but the she'r is flawless according to Arooz. Something to think about, is it not?
> > > Definitely something to think about, Sarwar sahib. We have previously discussed in Alup examples of asha'ar by established poets where the two misraas are in slightly different beHrs. I am still pretty clueless as to how and when to decide if those asha'ar are flawless (or flawed).
> > > Let me explain:
> > > >
> > > > There is an important principle in Arooz called "Taskeen-e-Ausat" (explanation and details deferred for later). When you apply it to the first miSra', a new wazn emerges (maf,oolu, mu,faa,ee,lun, maf,oo,lu, mu,faa,ee, lun) i.e. the wazn of the second miSra' ! How neat!
> > > That's a 'wow' neat! I will wait for your deferred explanation and details, because honestly this is way beyond my current level of expertise.
> > > Arooz allows the use of these miSra's in the Ghazal. The principle and the usage are universally accepted and practiced by those who know! Thanks for your time and attention.
> > > >
> > > > Sarwar Raz
> > > Sarwar sahib, thanks for your time and attention. Alup has not been as vibrant lately as it once was, the golden phase is long over. Your presence is infusing new life in the group, I am hoping you will continue to participate as much as you can. We need you here.
> > >
> > > Thank you.
> > >
> > > PS: I will not ask you anymore to grade my paper. But maybe an 'A' for effort? At least I tried! :-)
> > >
> > > Thank you, for everything,
> > >
> > > Your 'nowhere near graduation' pupil,
> > >
> > > ________Zoya
> > ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
> > Dear Zoya: I am afraid (and sorry) you are reading more into my response than I ever intended. Just look at how you have interpreted the word "riddle". Perhaps we will talk outside of ALUP? Thanks.
> >
> > Raz