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by: Ilya Shambat - Wed, 1 Jun 2022 01:58 UTC

I will send a piece of me to you
Through the thinness of the morning air,
It will penetrate your eyes of blue
And remain inside your heart forever.

I will send a piece of me to you
Over poppies, vilets and roses,
It will vanish in a church's pew
And resurface where your soul reposes.

I will send a piece of me to you -
You alone in all of humankind -
It will disappear from my view
And become a figment of your mind.

I will send a piece of me to you -
Nowhere else I'd send it to instead -
I will tell you to take it - take two -
And retain them all inside your head.

I will send a piece of me to you
Over oceans and over lands,
It will be so supple and so new -
Mold it, mold it, mold it with your hands.

I will send a piece of me to you -
A created piece, a piece complete -
Let it be your own, I say this too,
To just trample underneath your feet.

I will send a piece of me to you
I do not know where, nor even when,
I will send it how, I wish I knew,
To expire and live in you again.

I will send pieces of me to you
In the winter, summer, spring and fall,
And inside your being they'll accrue
Until I am none and we are all.

Ilya Shambat
https://sites.google.com/site/ibshambatpoetry

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From: michaelm...@gmail.com (Michael Pendragon)
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by: Michael Pendragon - Wed, 1 Jun 2022 02:49 UTC

On Tuesday, May 31, 2022 at 9:58:05 PM UTC-4, ibsh...@gmail.com wrote:
> I will send a piece of me to you
> Through the thinness of the morning air,
> It will penetrate your eyes of blue
> And remain inside your heart forever.
>
> I will send a piece of me to you
> Over poppies, vilets and roses,

Don't you ever proofread, Ilya?

> It will vanish in a church's pew
> And resurface where your soul reposes.
>
> I will send a piece of me to you -
> You alone in all of humankind -
> It will disappear from my view
> And become a figment of your mind.
>
> I will send a piece of me to you -
> Nowhere else I'd send it to instead -
> I will tell you to take it - take two -
> And retain them all inside your head.
>
> I will send a piece of me to you
> Over oceans and over lands,
> It will be so supple and so new -
> Mold it, mold it, mold it with your hands.
>
> I will send a piece of me to you -
> A created piece, a piece complete -
> Let it be your own, I say this too,
> To just trample underneath your feet.
>
> I will send a piece of me to you
> I do not know where, nor even when,
> I will send it how, I wish I knew,
> To expire and live in you again.
>
> I will send pieces of me to you
> In the winter, summer, spring and fall,
> And inside your being they'll accrue
> Until I am none and we are all.
>
> Ilya Shambat
> https://sites.google.com/site/ibshambatpoetry

This reminds me of one of my short stories, "Fool for Love." It's a black comedy about a jilted lover who sends severed parts of himself to his ex-girlfriend. I'm not sure if you're also going for humor here, but I got a few hearty chuckles out of it.

Michael Pendragon
" [Will Dockery] can't write poetry.
[Will Dockery] can't actually write a good song lyric so you pass the crud as poetry.
And you [Will Dockery] have no tools for criticism."
-- Rafael Corazon

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by: General-Zod - Fri, 3 Jun 2022 19:27 UTC

Ilya Shambat wrote:
>
> I will send a piece of me to you
> Through the thinness of the morning air,
> It will penetrate your eyes of blue
> And remain inside your heart forever.

> I will send a piece of me to you
> Over poppies, vilets and roses,
> It will vanish in a church's pew
> And resurface where your soul reposes.

> I will send a piece of me to you -
> You alone in all of humankind -
> It will disappear from my view
> And become a figment of your mind.

> I will send a piece of me to you -
> Nowhere else I'd send it to instead -
> I will tell you to take it - take two -
> And retain them all inside your head.

> I will send a piece of me to you
> Over oceans and over lands,
> It will be so supple and so new -
> Mold it, mold it, mold it with your hands.

> I will send a piece of me to you -
> A created piece, a piece complete -
> Let it be your own, I say this too,
> To just trample underneath your feet.

> I will send a piece of me to you
> I do not know where, nor even when,
> I will send it how, I wish I knew,
> To expire and live in you again.

> I will send pieces of me to you
> In the winter, summer, spring and fall,
> And inside your being they'll accrue
> Until I am none and we are all.

> Ilya Shambat
> https://sites.google.com/site/ibshambatpoetry

Quite excellent I.S. as always.....!

Learned men are the cisterns of knowledge, not the fountainheads.

arts / alt.arts.poetry.comments / Pieces

Subject	Author
Pieces	Ilya Shambat
Re: Pieces	Michael Pendragon
Re: Pieces	General-Zod